Sable Lit Reviews Spooky Special: The Grave Finale
By LMReviews on Oct 10, 2008 in Multicultural Contributors, Multicultural Writing
THE GRAVE : The Finale
By GW Pickle
Suddenly I am no longer tired. I’m not lying in a cemetery dying. No, I’m dead. I feel so peaceful. I’m floating away from the grave, floating towards this bright light. Everything goes white as the light surrounds me. The next thing I know I’m standing on a on a hill. Looking off in the distance I see fields of green with a gold road that ends at a large walled city. Suddenly a hand grabs my shoulder. I jump reflexively, freeing myself as I turn around. I see myself. “Bill? Is that you, in my body?” I start to laugh as I realize that we’ll probably be trapped in each other’s body for eternity. God, I hope not. I want my body back.
“Yes, it’s me. I’m a bit surprised to see you here. What happened? Your so-called spell didn’t work, again. I was in good health. How did I die before you?”
“I can answer in one word, Linda. The B….” I can’t seem to say the word.
“I don’t think cussing is allowed here.”
“Bill, I died before you because Linda poisoned me. I couldn’t save her dad the way I saved myself.”
“And she settles the score and ends up with everything. Ariel, I should be mad at you for killing me, but for some reason I’m not. “
“The same way I should be furious at you for cheating on me.”
A winged stranger appears before us. “Bill, Ariel it’s time to make a choice.”
“What do you mean choice? I thought we were to be judged and either go to Heaven or Hell. That’s what I’ve preached all these years.”
“You’re right, but in some cases we give you a chance to go back.”
“You mean reincarnation?”
“Yes, but it’s your choice.”
“If I choose not to go back what happens?”
“You’ll be judged. Look the reason you are in Elysian Fields is you’re almost too good for Hell and not quite good enough for Heaven. We are giving you a second chance. My advice is to go back and start over.”
“One question, please, before I go back. What is your name?”
“Lucifer.”
Bill blurts out. “You’re the devil?”
“Yes and I serve God from Hell. He lets me come here to persuade those who should go back to do so.”
Before we could protest our surroundings start to fade. I see another angel appear. “Lucifer, I see you’re sending two more souls back to Hell again, without due process.”
Everything goes dark. I feel someone pick me up by my ankles and slap my bottom. I start crying. I hear someone say, “Linda, the first is the boy, and now, here comes his sister.”
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G W Pickle
(c) All Rights Reserved by GW Pickle
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In the next month you’ll get a glimpse into GW Pickle’s published book, SENTI: Book One of the Jackwill Chronicles. He has submitted it for review and I can’t wait to bring it to you!!
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Major Jack Waco was the best pilot in the SENTI Command. A self-proclaimed loner, he thought he didn’t need anything or anyone until he met Major Maggie Wilson, who challenged those preconceptions. Maggie’s resemblance to an important person from Jack’s past revived memories and feelings within him, sending his head and his heart into turmoil. With a government conspiracy on-hand and large-scale interstellar piracy threatening the very stability of the galaxy, will Jack be able to cope with these newly-awakened feelings in time to succeed in bringing the guilty to justice or would he be betrayed by them – far out in a newly-discovered planetary system on the other side of the galaxy?
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I LOVE the twist at the end!
Twists are one of my favourite literary devices and I love the way Pickles uses them.